Friday, February 16, 2018

Copy Editing Project

Here is a sample of my copy editing. This came from a local farmers market and its intended use is for a Facebook post in the borough that hosts the market.

Original Copy:

MFM believes that through tailored education opportunities, we are instilling and nurturing local food sourcing values within our community. This belief closely aligns with the goals of MFM to increase domestic consumption of, and access to, locally and regionally produced agricultural products. MFM intends to educate members of the general public of all ages therefore encouraging them to become loyal and sustainable customers through several proposed planned initiatives collectively called “Farmers Market Connect.”

Educating the general public regarding farmers markets and local food sourcing is important. The new program entitled, “Farmers Market Connect” will provide local consumers with education on local food sourcing. It will also inspire consumers to apply their new-found knowledge within their homes and lives through covered topics featuring concepts such as healthy eating, seasonal eating, food preservation, gardening, and other important farming concepts. This program will reach targeted age sectors of the community allowing us to promote specific objectives to the demographics they best serve. Overall, Farmers Market Connect will help establish MFM as an authority on fresh foods.

My Copy Edit:

The MFM “Farmers Market Connect” Initiative

Monroe Farmers Market intends to promote locally grown foods in the community through a new educational initiative, the “Farmers Market Connect” program. MFM’s goal is to educate the public of all ages, increase access to and consumption of local foods, and foster a loyal customer base.  

“Farmers Market Connect” will provide instruction on local agriculture, healthy eating, food preservation, understanding seasonal produce, and gardening, inspiring people to apply a world of new-found knowledge in their daily lives. The project will reach different age groups within the community, allowing MFM to advance specific objectives to the individuals best served.

“Farmers Market Connect” will establish Monroe Farmers Market as an authority on the fresh foods of this region. 

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